The question is:Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays,the phenomenon that primary schools offer foreign language courses for students is becoming more and more common.And some experts believe that it is better for children to learn a foreign language earlier.

More experimental results indicate that younger children have more potentials to master a foreign language.Because their thinking hasn't been limited by their own mother tongue and they are good at imitating others as well.In addition, children in primary school have more energies and curiosities which are quite important to learn a new language.For example, young children are always interested in the sign boards on the street which are written some words they don't know and they ask their parents tirelessly.Furthermore, primary school children aren't afraid of making mistakes like older children and adults.So they can practice what they learn quite boldly in front of others.

On the other hand, some teachers may not have the standard pronunciation which is extremely important for beginners.To solve this problem, government could provide language teachers professional training.And some people are worried about whether learning a different language will increase pressure on students.If teachers can teach by organizing different games and playing interesting cartoons in class, I believe that children will learn a language in a fun and invisible way.

In conclusion, it is better to learn a foreign language at primary school.Although there are some difficulties in making all children learn foreign languages earlier, we can make efforts to do better.

扫了几眼，总体还不错，但是很多that给人一种文笔不成熟的感觉。 另外，有一些表达带有中文腔，你的词汇量还是较高的，但是我建议你不要过多使用自己暂时不能驾驭的词语，如果以25分为中分，应该有20分左右

我们老师说 不要用more and more 看了这个他就会觉得写的不好 他建议用grow 而且 尽量要用短句